History and Politics Personal Statement 6
Many talk of the merits of History and Politics but my reasons for studying these subjects are not utilitarian; if their study were proved to be useless I would still study them for sheer pleasure. History has become more interesting as it has become more challenging. I have enjoyed it more since the Politics became more central and have also recognised the necessity of knowing some Economics. The first history books I read were the Beevor books, Stalingrad and Berlin: The Downfall, which were enlightening. Despite the saturation of the curriculum with WWII, I knew little about the war on the Eastern Front. At school I am in the History Society where I gave a talk, 'Blair and Pitt the Younger: A Comparison.' To prepare I read Hague's biography of Pitt and 'The Spin Doctor's Diary' by Price. I noticed the similarities between the various coercion acts passed by Pitt and legislation passed during the 'War on Terror'. I entered the St Hugh's College essay prize on the same subject. I also entered the Peterhouse essay prize using the John Stuart Mill's 'stupid conservative...' quote. In preparation I read his essay 'On Liberty'. At my secondary school I won the history prize three times. As an extension to my A levels I have read parts of Evans on Peel; Doyle and Schama on the French Revolution; Plowright on Liverpool and Kee on Irish Nationalism. I am a member of the Labour Party and was election agent to the local candidate. Although we lost we trebled our vote. I attend party events and have just enjoyed my first conference where I spoke to members of the shadow cabinet. I have read much about the party history, particularly enjoying 'The Benn Diaries'. Most of all I have become obsessed with Nye Bevan, reading Foot's biography and also reading 'In Place of Fear'. I recently gave a talk on Bevan to the History Society. I ran a successful campaign for my school to take the Morning Star last year and I also started a socialist choir. I pestered my MP, Ben Wallace, for work experience. One highlight was making a cup of tea for Ken Clarke! My time in the Commons confirmed politics as my career choice. I also did work experience with a local paper and the Sunday Express. I thought up the nickname 'Bermuda Pie-angle' for the obese Bermudan Cricketer Dwayne Leverock, which was used in the paper. I recently gave an assembly, 'The National Debt, a Balanced Perspective.' I stated that as a percentage of GDP our debt is at the mid point for the last 300 years and average compared to other rich countries. I also said that the majority of the deficit is cyclic rather than structural. To research this I read 'The Affluent Society' and 'The Great Crash' by Galbraith; Brown’s 'Beyond the Crash' and the 'Communist Manifesto' by Marx. The Great Crash has influenced me most. It should be essential reading for those who enter public office, and then our leaders would be aware how dangerous it is for people to believe that they can make money from thin air. I also watched the Curtis series 'All Watched Over by Machines of Loving Grace', which talked about the idea of permanent market stability with computers as the stabiliser. This juxtaposition, of the Great Crash and the TV series, led me to compare how the politicians of the 20's believed that the infallibility of financiers would mean that share prices would reach a permanent plateau, and how modern politicians believed that the infallibility of computers would mean that boom and bust would be abolished. Apart from my main interest of reading, I am in the Debating Society; I play the piano and will sit my Grade 6 exam soon. I also play cricket, tennis, 5-a-side football and 2nd team football. I attained the bronze D of E award and I enjoy fell walking. I was recently made a prefect after submitting an application based on a Robespierre speech. I hope I have persuaded you to let me study two of the things I love at your university and that my attempt to trumpet hasn't sounded like a tin whistle.
Universities Applied to:
- Oxford (History and Politics) - Offer (AAA) Firm
- Sheffield (History and Politics) - Offer (AAA) Insurance
- York (History and Politics) - Offer (AAA)
- Warwick (History and Politics) - Offer (AAA)
- Nottingham (History and Politics) - Offer (AAA)
- Chemistry (A2) - B
- Physics (A2) - A
- History (A2) - A
- Maths (A2) - A*
Article by TSR User on Thursday 15 February 2018
Most people find starting their statement to be the most difficult, and a blank piece of paper or computer screen can be horribly intimidating. Most people won’t be able to just start writing the statement off the top of their head, so it’s a good idea to jot down a few notes first. The main things to think about are:
- What do I want to study? (if you can't answer this, you should probably concentrate on working this out, rather than writing a PS)
- Why do I want to study it?
- What personal qualities, interests and experience do I have which show I am suited to study this subject at university?
- What are my other interests and skills?
These are the main things to start with. If this still doesn’t help, you can look at a few more detailed starting points. Many people have trouble writing about themselves and their personal qualities, so if you’re having trouble with this step, pop down to a library or bookshop and get a book out on writing CVs, which will go into this process in much more depth.
Something that has helped others is to put these headings down on a piece of paper, in a rough table, and to carry that piece of paper around. Every time you think of something, you can write it down before you forget about it. I always found that inspiration struck me as I was walking to sixth form. Unfortunately, by the time I was able to write it down, I'd forgotten it! Carry paper with you wherever you go!
Turning Your Notes Into A Personal Statement
By this point, you've hopefully worked out what it is you want to study, and you've made some basic notes on what you want to include. Hopefully, it should get progressively easier from this point onwards. When writing a personal statement, there are certain things you want to include/leave out, and lots of important things to think about.
Things to consider
- You've got 47 lines and 4000 characters (including spaces). If you leave lines between paragraphs - which you should - then 3500 characters is a more realistic limit.
- Get your personal statement typed up on a word-processor, for example Microsoft Word. Then copy and paste it onto your form on the UCAS website - this allows you to run spell check easily. (Please note, though, that Word adds "curly" quotation marks and other characters (like é or ü) that won't show up on your UCAS form, so do proofread it on UCAS before submitting it to ensure it is how you typed it.)
- Have a backup of the file containing your personal statement in a different place from your original statement file, for example on a disc.
- Bear in mind that extra spaces (e.g. at the beginnings of paragraphs as indentation) are removed on UCAS.
What should you include?
A basic list, which is by no means conclusive is:
- Interest in the course: Why do you want to spend three years studying this subject at University level
- What you've done outside your A-level syllabus or outside school that demonstrates this interest : fairs/exhibitions, public lectures, voluntary work that is relevant to your subject and shows you are thinking beyond the A level syllabus
- Relevant work experience (non-vocational courses like English won't require this)
- Skills and qualities required for that career if appropriate (medicine, nursing and law as obvious examples)
- Interest in your current studies - what particular topics have made an impression on you
- Any other interest/hobbies/experiences you wish to mention that are relevant either to the subject or 'going to Uni' : don't just list your hobbies, you need to be very selective and state clearly what difference doing these things have made to you
- Plans for a gap year if deferring entry.
What’s the most important part?
Why do I want to study this subject at University? If your PS doesn't answer this simple question above all else, then start again.
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What sort of structure should I use?
It isn't an essay. Start with the course/subject, and why you want to do it, then mention what else you do outside school - relevant work experience and extra curricular activities. Keep the paragraphs (and ideas) simple and to the point.
As a guide, spend around 60% of the space talking about your course, why you want to do it and how you’re suited to it, and 30% on your work experience and any other activities that are relevant to your subject and 10% on any obvious career aspirations/gap year plans.
Exactly how you write your statement depends on your subject - generally people write more about work experience for vocational subjects like Medicine and Law than they would for subjects like maths or English where work experience is less important. Remember that it should be about why you want to study your chosen subject. It should not simply be an essay about what you are doing in your A-level syllabus.
Do not write your personal statement in the form of a letter. Lines such as "Dear sir/madam" or "Thank you for reading".
Avoid jokes. These can often be misinterpreted.
Never, ever, criticise you current school or college or try to 'blame' any other individual such as a teacher for any previous poor exam performance etc.
You must write in grammatically correct, and coherent, English.
Should I talk about my qualifications?
Yes and No.
There’s already a section on the UCAS form for this, so don’t waste the space on your personal statement listing your A-level topics or UMS scores. If you have something important which doesn't go in the qualifications section, ask your referee to put it down in your reference – it will sound better if it comes from them than from you. This goes for module marks as well.
If, however, you've done a major piece of coursework on something relevant to your degree subject, you're currently studying the subject at A level that you hope to take at university or have studied topics related to your proposed degree subject then do mention these things. Explain in detail which part of your current studies you enjoy, what you've learnt, how it has increased your enthusiasm for the subject, and any extra reading you've done as a result of this.
How do I write it for two different courses?
There’s no easy way to write a personal statement for two totally unrelated courses. If the courses are similar (i.e. business studies and economics) you may find you can write a statement relevant to both, without mentioning either subject by name. If the courses are completely unrelated, it may be impossible to write for both subjects without your personal statement sounding vague and unfocused. Instead you will need to concentrate on just one subject and ignore the other – it sometimes works!
How do I prioritise my ideas?
A simplistic approach is to include anything about the course towards the beginning of the statement, and anything that’s less relevant towards the end.
A very simple structure might be:
- Introduction: Why do you want to do the course, how did you make your decision, show your enthusiasm for the subject - why do you want to spend three/four years at Uni studying this subject in depth?
- Relevant work experience [for vocational degrees only - for non vocational courses relevant work experience isn't necessary so can be left out of a PS if you haven't done any] and subject relevant extra-curriculars : anything that you've done which is relevant to the subject can go here. Also briefly mention any career aspirations.
- Enthusiasm for current studies and specific examples of current work that your enjoyed.
- Skills and qualities: What skills and qualities have you demonstrated that will you need to do this course. Do NOT just list skills though, give examples of circumstances when you've displayed or used those skills - in fact you don't even have to mention the "skill" at all.
- Anything else: This paragraph usually contains brief details of what else you do with your life besides studying. Try to link it with the course oe subject you are applying for, or to having the required maturity to 'going to University'. If you're deferring entry, an explanation of your gap year plans can go here.
- Conclusion: Sum up why you think the university would want to make you an Offer.
Things that will make little or no difference to a UCAS application
- Positions of Responsibility like Prefect or Head Girl. Universities aren't impressed by this as they will have no idea how or why you got the job - and it tells them nothing about your intellect or academic potential
- Expensive voluntary work overseas. If its obvious that you were able to do this only because of your parental income it won't impress an Admissions Tutor at all. They know that you'd get the same experience of 'life' working in your local charity shop once a week.
- Work experience that you only got because of your parent's job or social status. Work experience at one leading Law firm might be excusable, anything more than that looks suspicious.
- Clever remarks about leading academics in that subject. You'll just look immature.
After You've Written It
I cannot emphasise enough the importance of checking your PS, especially when it comes to spelling, punctuation and grammar. No matter how good the content of your PS, if it reads like it was written by a 10-year old, it won't reflect very well on your ability to cope with a degree.
It's also important to check the balance of your personal statement. A common mistake is to write too much about your extra curricular activities or about your current subjects and not to explain clearly what you like about the subject you plan to study for the next 3+ years of your life.
Compare what you've produced against your notes and/or plan (you did do these, didn't you?). If it's deviated significantly, is this for the better, or has it made your statement worse than it could have been? Did you miss anything out that you wanted to include?
If you can't find a willing victim to proofread your statement, don't forget that TSR offers the PS Help service where you can post your statement for confidential checking and advice.
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Article by TSR User on Thursday 15 February 2018